T3+writing

thursday 15th september sc recall past events use personal pro nouns has an introduction has a concluision has sequenced in order is written in past tense tells us what when why where -introduction personal comments conjunctions to connect time (firstly shortly next) adjectives big nouns climbing sam verb run camp day 1 tramp cooked own meals set up rooms nightwalk spotlight day 2 swimming loop track fire lighting abl art burma trail spotlight day 3 act day 1 spotlight possum hunting swimming bombfire night day 4 act day 2 sl camp camp concert day 5 clean up eel clash of the camp scav hunt home walt describe our camp experiences by creating a diamante poem W.A.L.T. use a range of language features to write descriptive stories the hippo storie

boom bang smack i am a fat hippo ninja and when im not fighting ants i am doing my hard puzzel that is very hard because this big tiny fish made it for me just to see if i could do it so it is hard and i like to do it when i am eatting i look like a big hippo with one eye and a fat head so as i was doing this puzzel it was as hard as me tryying to eat a pie then i fished it because when i was talking to you about it i did it but i must say that it was very hard. but before you go would. //What? this story doesn't make sense? Big, tiny fish? which one is it? big or tiny? There isn't a lot of language features used. You didn't complete the S.C. // //Next learning steps: // //Read your work, make sure it makes sense. // //Think about your story? what is it about? // //Think about the beginning, middle and end. the ending "but before you go would"? would what? //