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wednesday 14th september w.a.l.t. follow the features of recount writing recount retells how events in the order they occurred

Persuasive writing about why come and see b.o.p?.

14.4.2011

WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty.

Success Criteria My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion I will state and restate my opinion I use a range of language resources and punctuation My paragraphs follow the S E E structure

The bay of plenty has plenty of tourist attractions like the mount beach and bay - park speedway are all good to enjoy for when you are feeling board and wanting to do something. the mount has breath taking views of the sea and of course white island you can also have a swim at the beach which is just right next to the mount. The bay park speedway is a huge stadium that has a grass felid in the center and a clay race track on the out side of the center going round in a zero. on Saturday nights bay park does racing in small one man cars and nearly all made of metal. this is really fun to watch.The bay of plenty also has baywave and a huge shopping center that has nearly every thing you need but the 3 small problems are there is a lot of traffic and the speed way is chocoa block nearly every time also the beach is hard out taken with other people Jono I don't want you to put the negative things about the BOP into your argument, you should be focusing on getting me to the BOP!!! This is incomplete and doesn't follow the correct structure for a persuasive argument. Where are your three paragraphs? Some excellent language used to convince me to come but your ideas need to be structured more. Not your best effort here Jono. Miss Crone